Two Different State
200903084 CHUNG Kyung Seo
November 17, 2010
My interest in English and the U.S. cultures started when I studied at Junior High school for two years in two different states, Massachusetts and Alabama in the U.S. Yet, these two distinctive states have some commons. Personally, it was the most valuable and wonderful experience in my life.
I lived in Cambridge, Massachusetts a year and I spent a year in Auburn, Alabama. Because of the location, these cities are different in somehow. The weather in Cambridge is much like Seoul, South Korea. It has distinct four seasons. It snows a lot. I and my friends used to go outside to ride a sleigh. But when I moved to Auburn, I didn't bring a sleigh. It rarely snows. The weather is smoother and warmer in the South. So I didn't need to worry about getting a cold. I truly understand meaning of 'melting pot' in Cambridge. There were many people around from other countries. It was no surprise at all when I saw other Koreans. In contrast, Auburn wasn't really a melting pot. In fact, it was a small city. Our school had only five Asians. Cambridge, a historical city surrounded by many old buildings, is similar to Auburn. Both cities are compacted with schools. Cambridge is famous for having two schools: Harvard University and M.I.T. Auburn University is located in Auburn as well. Thereby, I was exposed to academic surrounding. Both school works encouraged me a lot. I had a chance to get a drawing lesson from school and was nurtured by the guidance of my art teacher, Ms. Besty Logan in Auburn.
I am so grateful that I had various cultural experiences by living in two different places, New England state as well as the Southern state, which also nurture me to build up my dreams.
From Yu Hyelee To Chung Kyungseo
ReplyDelete1.Does your thesis statement compare two subjects?
Yes- Massachusetts and Alabama
2.Does one body paragraph focus on comparison and one on contrast?
There is one body paragraph and it has both comparison and contrast.
3.Does each body paragraph have a clear topic sentence?
Yes, it has.
4.Does each topic sentence state the point of comparison or contrast?
Yes, it does.
5.Does each paragraph contain details to support the comparison or contrast?
Yes, she wrote her experiences and reasons to support her opinion.
6.Did you use connectors to add coherence?
Yes, she used connectors very well.
To Chung Kyungseo From Seonyoung Blair Hwang
ReplyDelete1.Yes. She compares the States, Massachusetts and Alabama.
2. Yes. even though there is only one paragraph, it includes both comparison and contrast.
3. Yes. she clearly mentioned her main point in each paragraph.
4. The first and the second one shows the comparison and contrast, and the third one shows her own feelings of her experiences in two different states.
5. Yes. She gave details when she explains something about the states.
6. Yes. I can see connectors in her writing.
My interest in English and the U.S. cultures started when I studied at Junior High school for two years in two different states, Massachusetts and Alabama in the U.S. Yet, these two distinctive states have in some commons. Personally, it was the most valuable and wonderful experience in my life.
ReplyDeleteI lived in Cambridge, Massachusetts a year and I spent a year in Auburn, Alabama. Because of the location, these cities are different in somehow. The weather in Cambridge is much like Seoul, South Korea. It has distinct four seasons. It snows a lot. I and my friends used to go outside to ride a sleigh. But when I moved to Auburn, I didn’t need to bring a sleigh. It rarely snows. The weather is smoother and warmer in the South. So I didn’t worry about getting a cold. I truly understand meaning of ‘melting pot’ in Cambridge. There were many people around from other countries. It was no surprise at all when I saw other Koreans. In contrast, Auburn wasn’t really a melting pot. In fact, it was just a small city. Our school had only five Asians. Cambridge, a historical city surrounded by many old buildings, is similar to Auburn. Both cities are compacted with schools. Cambridge is famous for having two schools: Harvard University and M.I.T. Auburn University is located in Auburn as well. Thereby, I was exposed to academic surroundings. Both school works encouraged me a lot. I had a chance to get a drawing lesson from school and was nurtured by the guidance of my art teacher, Ms. Besty Logan in Auburn.
I am so grateful that I had various cultural experiences by living in two different places, New England state as well as the Southern state, which are completely different areas yet have some similarities. So it was much easier for me when I moved to Auburn.