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There are a lot of great things around us and the greatest thing I choose are 'friends'. Everyone need to maintain friendship among friends to make their lives more abundant and cheerful. Friends help us emotionally when we feel bad and give us courage when we try to start something new. Even though friends are not blood related relationship, it is sometimes more powerful than that among family members. Therefore, as we live through our lives, it's important to put our effort to make relationship among friends tight and strong. Friends will be one of the most important value that we need to cherish to make our journey in lives more beautiful. To make our long journey in lives more happy, friends will be always needed. |
Saturday, September 11, 2010
200800759 김주연(Kim, Juyeon)
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To Jueyon Kim from Seonyoung Hwang week2
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is your topic that something great is friends. For the reason I definately agree to you, so I liked your topic.
2. Your main point seems to be keeping friendship is great because it makes people's life much more happy by helping each other.
3. "Friends help us emotionally when we feel bad and give us courage when we try to start something new." stuck me because in my experience, when I was in trouble, my friends cared me a lot. They tried to give me advices and keep in touch with me as much as they can.
I absolutely agree with this line.
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5. It would improve your writing skill a lot if some grammatical errors are corrected; Friends will be one of the most important values that ...
To Kin Juyeon From Yu Hyelee
ReplyDeleteAssignmnet-2010-09-11
1. What I like about this piece of writing is your opinion about your topic. Because I agree with your opinion so I could sympathize.
2. Your main point seems to be making relationship between friends tight and strong is important.
3. "To make our long journey in lives more happy, friends will be always needed." struck me because it makes me realize the importance of friends.
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5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to add more explanations. It would be much great if you add how to make relation strong or why sometimes friends are even better that a family.