I am not a sea food fan
pg. 41 essay first draft Kim Kyung Un
I am always open minded and willing to try new foods. Whenever I traveled to different countries, I remember tasting exotic foods of that country without any hesitation. However, there has always been one type of food that I have disliked throughout my whole life, which is sea food. In particular, I hate eating crab, squid, clam, lobster and oyster. I've tried eating these food many times before whenever my parents convinced me that they are very good for my health. But, I either threw up after chewing on it carefully or spit it out before I got the full taste of it. I think the reasons why I hate sea food are because of the taste and the fishy smell that makes me queasy. But most of all, eating sea food reminds me of a painful memory of my childhood.
When I was in elementary school, abundant amount of food was served on a big silver plate for every lunch. I always feared the day when sea food such as crab and clams came out as a side dish. My homeroom teacher used to make me and my classmates finish eating all the food on the plate with no leftovers. Whenever I stood in line to get food on my own plate, I remember how I truly wished if the cafeteria lady knew my feelings towards seafood. As I tried one of the clams, I felt like I wanted to throw up immediately. Unluckily, my teacher caught me spitting it out on the floor and trying to secretly throw away the clams on to the ground. Therefore, I had to eat twice as much as I had in the beginning. Thus, I could say that was the most excruciating moment of my life, which probably is the main reason that put me off from eating sea food.
A lot of the people look at me as if I am insane when I tell them that I don't like sea food. Also, every time my family members try to force me or insist I try some, while they already know that I am going to refuse persistently. However, I believe that there are many people who don't like certain things due to bad memories or experiences which have been imprinted in their minds. Thus, just like these people, I think my childhood memory with seafood somehow developed an intense hatred that put me off from eating it. However, even though I am intolerant to sea food, I am always willing to try new things because it is fun and discovering new food that I haven't tried yet is very adventurous.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is clear point of view.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to describing why you don’t like seafood.
3. “However, I believe that there are many people who don't like certain things due to bad memories or experiences which have been imprinted in their minds.” struck me as powerful because I agree with your opinion.
4. none
5. I don’t think you really need a last sentence of third paragraph.
pg. 41 essay second draft Kim Kyung Un
ReplyDeleteI am not a seafood fan
When it comes to new foods, you can always count on me to be the first one to try it. My father travels a lot for a living, so I have had many opportunities to try many different exotic dishes. However, there is one type of food that either makes me puke or run away screaming in terror: seafood. Though my parents constantly lecture me about how healthy it is, I have hated it as long as I can remember and an incident from my childhood intensified that hate for the rest of my life.
When I was in elementary school, an abundant amount of food was served on a big silver plate for every lunch. I always feared the day that seafood was the main dish on the menu. My homeroom teacher was very adamant about cleaning our plates and leaving no food behind, so naturally I was constantly tempted to run away from the lunch line. One day, as I tried one of the clams, I felt like I wanted to throw up immediately. Unfortunately, the teacher caught me spitting it out on the floor and trying to secretly throw away the clams, so as punishment I had to eat twice as much as I had in the beginning. It was the most excruciating moment of my life, haunting me forever, further intensifying my hate for the horrible beast. My hate for it has caused lot of the people look at me as if I am insane throughout my life. My feelings are well known by my family members, yet they constantly insist on offering me some and even forcing me to eat it sometimes.
I believe that there are many people who don't like certain things due to bad memories or experiences which have been imprinted in their minds. Just like these people, my childhood memory with seafood somehow developed this intense hatred that put me off from eating it. However, even though I am intolerant to sea food, I am always willing to try new things. It’s fun discovering new food that I haven't tried yet because I love to live life adventurously.