My Great Experience in Cambodia
Traveling always makes me excited in terms of making it possible for me to get out of daily routines and refresh myself. Among the countries that I have ever been, one of the most adorable tourist spots was Angkor Wat, Cambodia. I can never forget its exotic and beautiful scenery. Every building of the place has its own feature, but they were harmonized perfectly at the same time. Especially, it was at sunrise and sunset that Angkor Wat boasts its beauty the most. Inside the buildings, there were carvings on the walls. It was fascinating enough to attract people's eyes because every single carved faces which are on the walls had different facial expressions such as crying, smiling, laughing, and so on. Having a trip to Cambodia was so impressive and beyond my expectations and the memories from there will be imprinted in my heart forever.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is describing Angkor Wat.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be having a great trip at Cambodia.
3. “It was fascinating enough to attract people’s eyes because every single carved faces which are on the wall had different facial expressions such as crying, smiling, laughing, and so on” struck me as powerful. I like it because it gives me clear vision to draw those walls in my head.
4. Last sentence seems to have many ideas on one sentence. I think you should break into two. The idea that trip to Cambodia was impressive and the memories that unforgotten can be separated.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to need more explanation of why you like there.
TO Seonyoung Hwang From Leejisuk
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is
your vivid expression you saw and felt while staying in Cambodia.
2.Your main point seems to be your great experience in Cambodia.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful: Having a trip to Cambodia was so impressive and beyond my expectations and the memories from there will be imprinted in my heart forever.
I like them because '~will be imprinted in my heart'is very poetic and impressive.
4. I think that this paragraph is really good, but if i have to choose one thing, i think that some descriptions will be better if they were changed to present tense.
5. I think this paragraph is very well-organized despite its length.