My little brother went music camp this summer. He is one of the violin players in orchestra. On the last day of camp, his orchestra performed. As I listen to his play, I remembered how great it was to be an orchestra member. Playing music in orchestra is hard. I have to practice a lot and listen to other sounds. And I have to follow conductor at same time. But playing music with various instruments gives me a wonderful time. I get to know the classic. I could distinguish the sounds of instruments. And performing music is awesome. It feels like I achieve something. Even though I don't play flute anymore, I would like to be at the orchestra.
I agree that playing or listening the orchestra is very good. It makes people enjoy both the player and listener. As the player of the orchestra, the harmony and cooperation between the orchestra members would be the good point of the orchestra too.
ReplyDelete1. I agree that playing or listening the orchestra is very good. It makes people enjoy both the player and listener.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be
: the orchestra is great
3. My little brother went music camp this summer. He is one of the violin players in orchestra.
-> I think the intro of your writing is good because you start with your experience. It makes readers more interesting.
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5. As the player of the orchestra, the harmony and cooperation between the orchestra members would be the good point of the orchestra too. If you add this line, the content will be more rich.