Being in American school
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CHUNG Kyung Seo
Moving to new place is always hard for me. My family lived a long time in one place until I was twelve. It was difficult for me to leave my old school to new one. I couldn't fit myself well in new school. I just wanted to go back to old school and old home. Instead of going back, my parents decided to go the United States. I was shocked. I couldn't believe it. Since it was for my father's work, I accepted their offer and glad that I can get out of this place. However I was afraid of new environment. Language is different, life-style is different and I was used to Korean people. After I stepped into airport, I felt scary.
As I experienced the transfer student in Korea, the first day of school is not great moment. I have to introduce myself to new faces, and try to be friends with them. They hardly know me and to them, I am new student. The memory of past gave me hard time. So it was difficult to face those students other than Koreans. There were sixteen students in my class. I was only Asian kid in my class. Since English is not my mother tongue, I was in hurry to listen to others and translate in my head. I think almost three months; I couldn't exactly understand what they are saying and how to say in English. Teachers helped me a lot and I assigned to have an ESL class, for students English as Second Language. This ESL teacher usually helped me to read. What we did was usually reading out loud a news article. He corrected my pronunciation. And find vocabularies that I don't know. He even repeated several times when he says something to me. He just wants to make sure I understand it clear. When my other teacher gave us to read book, it usually took a week to finish whole chapters. But with his help, it took three days to read. By the time goes, I improved a lot and can communicate others. I made some friends and didn't get scary when someone tries to speak with me.
It is unforgettable experience that I went to American school. It was not easy to get used to in English at first time. But with my teachers and friends, I started to understand it better. With this experience, I have confidence to speaking in English and get accustomed to other culture. It is my formative experience that I had.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is your conclusion part that shows well how it affected you to be a student in American school and what you learnt though your school life in the different culture.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be your American school life
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively): "The memory of past gave me hard time. So it was difficult to face those students other than Koreans." I cannot see the direct connection between first sentence and the second one. I think that you need to explain it more precisely.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is right use of verbs' tense. Since you used different tenses in a same sentence, it bothers me to read your writing and give me some difficulties to get your point right away.
To Kyungseo From Seonyoung Blair Hwang
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that you showed your scary feelings effectively by mentioning common statement so that to lead sympathy.
2. Your main point seems to be your process of adjusting your new American school.
3. 'With this experience, I have confidence to speaking in English and get accustomed to other culture.' The writer is saying that by having an experience of living abroad it gave her a confidence to speak English and accepting a new culture.
4. 'When my other teacher gave us to read book, it usually took a week to finish whole chapters. But with his help, it took three days to read.' is kind of confused to me because it doesn't show exact relation between the sentences. I could understand what you were trying to say, but I think putting 'While' instead of 'When' would be better. (If i am right, though)
5. I think it was a nice try to mentioning teacher's help to show the process of you adjusting the new culture. However, i think it seems quite typical to list only the teacher's help. It would be much better to provide specific helps or experiences that you underwent while you were taught by your teachers.
Moving to new place is always hard for me. My family lived a long time in one place until I was twelve. It was difficult for me to leave my old school to new one. I wasn’t able to fit well in new school. I just wanted to go back to old school and old home. Instead of going back, my parents decided to go the United States. I was shocked. I couldn’t believe it. Since it was for my father’s work, I accepted their offer and glad that I can get out of this place. However I was still afraid of new environment. Language is different, life-style is different and I was used to Korean people. After I stepped into airport, I felt scary.
ReplyDeleteAs I experienced the transfer student in Korea, the first day of school was not great moment. I had to introduce myself to new faces, and try to be friends with them. They hardly know me and to them, I am new student. The memory of past gave me hard time. So it was difficult to face those students who were not Koreans. There were sixteen students in my class. I was only Asian kid in my class. Since English is not my mother tongue, I was in hurry to listen to others and translate in my head. I think almost three months; I couldn’t exactly understand what they were saying and how to say in English. Teachers helped me a lot and I assigned to have an ESL class, for students English as Second Language. This ESL teacher usually helped me to read. What we did was usually reading out loud a news article. He corrected my pronunciation. And found vocabularies that I didn’t know. He even repeated several times when he says something to me. He just wanted to make sure I understand it clear. When my other teacher gave us to read a book, it usually takes me a week to finish whole chapters. He assigned me to read some part without looking a word in dictionary. He just wanted me to read with no handy work. And He got me a summary of this book. With his help, it took three days to read. By the time went, I improved a lot and was able to communicate others. I made some friends and didn’t get scary when someone tries to speak with me.
It is unforgettable experience that I went to American school. It was not easy to get used to in English at first time. But with my teachers and friends, I started to understand it better. With this experience, I have confidence to speaking in English and get accustomed to other culture. It is my formative experience that I had.