Homeroom teacher, MRS. Jang
We meet a lot of teachers in our life. Through elementary school to universities, I met many teachers and I could remember them. Some are good and some are bad. One teacher I really liked. Her name is Jang Hyo Soon.
First time I heard her name, I laughed so hard. Every Korean name ended with 'Soon' makes me laugh. Because in Chinese character, 'soon' means meek and innocence. Unlike her name, she was the toughest teacher in our high school. She was very strict on school's rule. For example, our school does not allow girls having permed. If she found out one of students had perm, she directly goes to hair salon with this girl. Every time she sees some girls who are smoking or permed, she shouts. "Hey you, stop there." I had much fun in teachers' room. I could see lots of freshmen and juniors making some kind of drama with Mrs. Jang.
She has keen eyes yet she is very sweet person. Since we were seniors preparing Sooneung, we got lots of pressure and stress. So by sneaking out school to skip our study after school was our excitement to relieve stress. Even though she knew we were against our school rules, on next day she bought us some chocolates to cheer us. Our class had own policy that not late for school. We ran, ran and ran to our class not to have sweeping floor, but most of time she was late than us. It was really thrilling to be on time. I still remember what time should we be in our class. It was 7:10.
She taught us well and helped us learn other things too. I took Sooneung twice. It was hard for me to take Sooneung twice. I lost my confidence and discouraged. But she called me to regain confidence. She introduced me to her new class. She told them that I am the greatest students in her life. And she told them she was proud of having me in her class. It really touched me. As listen to her introductory, I am glad she was my teacher.
To Cheong Kyung Seo From Kim Kyung Un
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that i can see how you were trying to explain your favorite teacher in detail by giving specific examples and memories.
2. Your main point seems to be my favorite teacher is Jang Hyo Soon.
3. I liked the sentence "Our class had own policy that not late for school. We ran, ran and ran to our class not to have sweeping floor, but most of time she was late than us. It was really thrilling to be on time. I still remember what time should we be in our class. It was 7:10 " because it reminds me of how my high school life used to be, always running to school to get on time.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me; "But she called me to regain confidence."
5. The one change you can make to better your writting is to organize well. I can see how much details you wanted to put in your essay. However, it is ramdomly put and the sentences don't really have a fluent connection with each other. I think you can either choose one example, such as how the teacher had keen eyes yet she was sweet, and make that in to a body paragraph instead of using to much different examples.
To Cheong Kyung Seo From Ju Yeon Kim Assignment week 6
ReplyDelete1. What I like about your writing is that you've explained to us about your teacher in such details. Therefore, for me, it was easy to imagine how she's like.
2. Your main point seems to be that your favorite teacher is "Jang Hyo Soon".
3. In your essay, I liked the sentence, "First time I heard her name, I laughed so hard". This sentence made me wonder, 'Why was it so funny?' and think of all the weird names I could imagine of, trying to guess. This made me concentrate more on your writing.
4. The sentence "But she called me to regain confidence" wasn't clear to me. Do you mean that she encouraged you?
5. The biggest improvement you can make in your writing, in my opinion, is adding more on your introduction paragraph. I think that the introduction paragraph is too short compared to all the writings beneath it. It might look and inform the readers better if your give hints about what details you are going to write about relevant to your favorite teacher in the introduction paragraph.
To Cheong Kyung Seo From Kim Si Eun Assignment week6
ReplyDelete1.What i like about your writing is your vivid experience
2.Your main point seems to be that your good teacher
3.I like 'Her name is Jang Hyo Soon' because it show me your writing is based on reality
4.Nothing
5.The biggest improvement you cna make in your writing is using quotation like her words or your conversations
During our life time, we meet lots of teachers. Through elementary school to universities, I met many teachers and I could remember all of them. Some teachers are good and some are bad. High school teachers mean a lot to Korean students. Since we take Korean SAT, students and teachers need to bond each other. In high school, there is one teacher I really liked. She was my senior homeroom teacher; her name is Jang Hyo Soon.
ReplyDeleteShe was the toughest teacher in our high school. She was very strict on school’s rule. For example, our school does not allow girls having permed. If she found out one of students had perm, she directly goes to hair salon with this girl. When I was in teachers’ room, I had much fun. I could see lots of freshmen and juniors making some kind of drama with Mrs. Jang. Every time she sees some girls who are smoking or permed, she shouts. “Hey you, stop there.”
She has keen eyes yet she is very sweet person. Since we were seniors preparing Sooneung, we got lots of pressure and stress. So by sneaking out school to skip our study after school was our excitement to relieve stress. Even though she does not like students against school policy, she overlooked. Next day she bought us some chocolates to cheer us instead. Our class had own policy that not late for school. We ran, ran and ran to our class not to have sweeping floor, but most of time she was late than us. It was really thrilling to be on time. I still remember what time should we be in our class. It was 7:10.
I took Sooneung twice. It was hard for me to take Sooneung twice. I lost my confidence and discouraged. But she called me to encourage. She told me that I am the greatest students in her life. And she was proud of having me in her class. It really touched me. As listening to her, I am glad she was my teacher. Still we are in contact. Sometimes, if I have a problem, I go to her school. It’s really great to have her as my teacher.