Taking entrance examination twice
'Failure is a stepping stone to success' . I realized this saying through taking Korean entrance examination twice. I'm not telling some obvious and boring story like I failed my first test but studying harder, I got a great grade in my second test. I failed my exam than before. Then how could I choose this failure for stepping stone for my life?
I learned that failure is not only limited to result. At first time, after taking second entrance examination, I resented my test score. I did my best and I believe this time is last chance of my life. But how could I get this result I had never taken before? So in my first year at university, I didn't believe any word related to efforts and didn't want to try harder to do anything. But time after time. taking a course named 'establishing with a little business', I thought again about examination. In that class. professor told us to follow what you want not to follow what other think it is better. After hearing that word, I looked back upon what I want, Taking good grade in exam and going to so called SKY university was what other think is best. I didn't know what was good for my life. Not only that class, meeting with various people in HUFS also changed my thought. I learned that taking entrance examination was not the end of my life and I have to ready for my real life. Also trying to read all kinds of books also made me mature. In world, everything couldn't works as I expected. It was not based on skepticism. By changing my view, I accepted my ability and knew which part I could do better.
To make failure become my stepping stone, I had to accepted it. First time I avoided it and I am busy in hiding it. But it didn't solve my problem. Right now I try to face the failure squarely. Taking exam was the best chance in my life because it was the biggest failure I got. But nothing could give me such a big lesson. Before trying to take other exam or do other thing, I apply my lesson that was finding which part I could do and being good at. These day I felt failure truly become my stepping stone.
From Noh Young Sun to Kim Si Eun
ReplyDelete1. I like the way you started off your essay. The quotation is a perfect hook that could get readers interested in your essay in a heart beat.
2. Your main point seems to be that taking Sunung twice helped you realize that sometimes we have to take failure at face value, instead of avoiding it.
3. I really like this sentence "In that class. professor told us to follow what you want not to follow what other think it is better." since I totally share his view.
4. Everything's clear
5. I think I would add details about people you met in Hufs and books that you read at that time that helped you cope with the bitter feelings that you had about the bad test results. Other than that I think it is perfectly written^^
To Sieun From Seonyoung Blair Hwang
ReplyDelete1. By quoting a saying, you effectively hook the readers. It is fresh and new unlike typical introduction.
2. Your main point seems that you got a precious lesson by the failure.
3. 'In that class. professor told us to follow what you want not to follow what other think it is better.' touched me because people all know what it's meaning but its hard to understand truly including me.
4. The last paragraph is not that clear to me especially 'But nothing could give me such a big lesson. Before trying to take other exam or do other thing, I apply my lesson that was finding which part I could do and being good at.' these sentences. I don't get it :P
5. If you mentioned your 'which part' more specifically, it would much better. It feels like kind of vague to understand what you learned exactly so, i think if you dealt with the part you learned specifically, it would provide you a great improvement.
To Kim Si Eun From Ju Yeon Kim
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that you wrote about your experience releated to Korea examination test, which I totally sympathize with! Moreover, I like the way you presented your introduction paragraph, and how you move toward the body paragraph by asking the readers a question.
2. Your main point seems to be that you learned a life lesson from your failure.
3. Among the sentences, the one that struck me most was this; "I learned that taking entrance examination was not the end of my life and I have to ready for my real life". I had an similar experience with you, and this was what I also thought after agonizing about the entrance examination for a while. It was hard to gain this thought as you said it, but like you pointed out, it is much better to think like this than just avoiding the reality.
4. Everything's clear
5. I think this essay could be much better if you add more details in your conclusion paragraph. Perhaps by adding more details of how you put your effort these days in order to not make the same mistakes you made before, or what you learned from your experience would make this paragraph much more descriptive. If you add more details and make the conclusion paragraph a little bit longer I think it would be much better!