New addiction, cell phone
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CHUNG Kyung Seo
When I take subway, bus or walking down the street, I could see many people holding a cell phone. Cell phone industry is the most fast growing. Every year, it produces new one. New one is cooler, better and has various functions as well. Recently, this smart phone emerged in the world. However I think this cell phone is too addictive to people.
Cell phone is becoming new addiction to human lives. Without cell phone, people could not answer the phone call, text message, take a picture, listen to music, and watch a TV show and even wake up in the morning. As smart phone becomes new tool, this gadget manipulates people to consume. In Korea, Cell phone industry is the most competitive one. Every year, cell phone companies release a new item. It adds many functions and design. Especially students and younger generation, they are sensible on trend and desire to possess something fascinating. Companies usually focus on these people and stimulate them to buy. Cell phone encourages excessive spending. Many people have argued that cell phone is for a multi-tasking. A cell makes possible to send email, arrange meeting and do other things anywhere and anyplace. But this multi tasking disturbs people. People cannot patient enough when cell phone is missing. It has to be somewhere around. If not, people feel more anxious and worried. It causes them to obsess. People should know that convenience would make you addiction.
We could not imagine how to live without cell phone. Cell phone helps us to communicate, entertain, and the other. As IT industry develops new cell phone, many people would change their cell phone. It causes them to overspend money. Also people would not be separated from cell phone. Checking a cell phone has turned into new habit of the modern. Of course, we cannot disagree with the advantages of cell phone. However we should alarm others not to addict to cell phone.
1. Does the essay have three paragraphs? yes
ReplyDelete2. Does the introduction include a hook to get the reader's attention along with background information? yes
3. Is the writer's opinion about the issue clearly stated in the thesis statement? yes
4. Does the body paragraph contain facts and reasons that support the opinion? yes
5. the points that you understand and agree with and explain why you agree.
- "Cell phone is becoming new addiction to human lives."
This is a quite global idea related to cell phone but at the same time, since it is undoubtedly true and modern human beings are getting to stick- even to a extent to worry about-to it even in their small, daily life, I absolutely agree with this point.
6. Write one or two questions about something that needs clarification or additional support.
- What other problems are there which bother people without cell phone?
- With developing cell phone following IT industry, what makes people overspend money?
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ReplyDeleteTo - CHUNG Kyung Seo From- Jitendra Kumar Gupta
1. Does the essay have three paragraphs?
- Yes, the essay has three paragraphs.
2. Does the introduction include a hook to get the reader’s attention along with background information?
- Yes.
3. Is the writer’s opinion about the issue clearly stated in the thesis statement?
- Yes.
4. Does the body paragraph contain facts and reasons that support the opinion?
- Yes.
5. Put a check in the margin next to the points that you understand and agree with. Explain why you agree.
- We could not imagine how to live without cell phone.
This is because this small electronic gadget becomes part and parcel of our day to day life.
6. Write one or two questions about something that needs clarification or additional support.
- Can you explain some disadvantage?
- Do you think people will go by your ideas of not using cell phone beside lots of advantages?
When I take subway, bus or walking down the street, I could see many people holding a cell phone. Cell phone industry is the most fast growing. Every year, it produces new one. New one is cooler, better and has various functions as well. Recently, this smart phone emerged in the world. However I think this cell phone is too addictive to most of the people.
ReplyDeleteCell phone is becoming new addiction to human lives. Without cell phone, people could not answer the phone call, text message, take a picture, listen to music, and watch a TV show and even wake up in the morning. As smart phone becomes new tool, this gadget manipulates people to consume. In Korea, Cell phone industry is the most competitive one. Every year, cell phone companies release a new item. It newly adds many functions and design. Especially students and younger generation, they are sensible to trend and desire to possess something fascinating. Companies usually focus on these people and stimulate them to buy. Cell phone encourages excessive spending. The digital gadget is everywhere. Most of people are communicating via cell phone now. I usually prefer calling or meeting face to face. But this texting is replacing a way of communication. Rather than seeing, these letters are representing what people feel, see, and say. It’s too sad to see people are communicating on a small screen.
Many people have argued that cell phone is for a multi-tasking. A cell makes possible to send email, arrange meeting and do other things anywhere and anyplace. But this multi tasking disturbs people. People cannot patient enough when cell phone is missing. It has to be somewhere around. If not, people feel more anxious and worried. It causes them to obsess. People should know that convenience would make you addiction.
We could not imagine how to live without cell phone. Cell phone helps us to communicate, entertain, and the other. As IT industry develops every new cell phone a year, many people would change their cell phone. It causes them to overspend money. Also people would not be separated from cell phone. Checking a cell phone has turned into new habit of the modern. Of course, we cannot disagree with the advantages of cell phone. However we should alarm others not to addict to cell phone.