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To Have a Successful Diet
"Do you want to have a slim body?" is the key advertisement phrase that made people buy a running machine through home shopping. Why did this phrase made people go over the telephone and order that running machine? It's probably because we are living in a world where a nice slim appearance is important which make people go on a constant diet. Especially women go on a diet due to the society's pressure or the media's effect on a nice slim body that a woman who's living in Korea's society should put their effort in order to obtain. Then, is there a way to have a successful diet that could give oneself a nice slim body? There is no right and certain way to loose weight than doing continual exercise. Even though there are medical treatments, pills that helps oneself loose weight, and even surgeries to loose fat, doing exercise almost everyday is the most certain and healthy way to loose weight. It is recommended by health experts to exercise, at least walk a hour a day in order to keep in shape. To loose weight and to gain a slim body, it is recommended to do exercise more than a hour since fat inside our body starts to burn after 20 minutes of exercise. On the type of exercise to loose weight, almost every kind of exercise is suitable. It is important to find the type of exercise one can do continuously, since doing exercise for a period of time is important. If one does an exercise and give up quickly, it is worse than not doing an exercise because the weight can increase suddenly due to the side effect. To loose more weight and gain a more perfect slim body, it is necessary to have a planned meal on top of a regular exercise. If one who does exercise everyday but eat more than usual will gain more weight than loosing it. Therefore, having a planned meal, a low-calorie or a low-fat based meal is important to loose extra weight. We can easily see books about diet meal in the bookstores which can guide us in planning a diet meal for a period of time. Normally reducing fat, for instance, eating natural foods and avoiding fast food, sugar and salty food will help one who's on diet loose weight more effectively. Therefore, it would be a good idea to clean the refrigerator or shelves in the kitchen and throw off all the junk and fat saturated food in order to have a successful diet. It is hard to loose weight and gain a slim body that most of us all dream of. It takes a lot of effort to loose extra weight and achieve a successful diet. Doing regular exercise and eating healthy meal plans not only help us loose weight but also make us one step closer to have a more healthier life. Therefore, it would be a good habit to keep in shape and gain a healthier life style by exercising regularly and eating natural food.
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Sunday, November 28, 2010
200800759 Ju Yeon Kim / pg 145 cause and effect essay, first draft
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To - Ju Yeon Kim From – Jitendra Kumar Gupta
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it is a meaningful writing which one can experience in day- to- day life.
2. Your main point seems to be about slim body.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
Words or lines - i) doing exercise almost everyday is the most certain and healthy way to loose weight.
ii) Doing regular exercise and eating healthy meal plans not only help us loose weight but also make us one step closer to have a healthier life.
I like them because these are facts but people like to ignore it.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, and writing not lively):
Lines or parts - woman who's living in Korea's society should put their effort in order to obtain
Need improving because I think this is not a complete sentence.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to write specific words.
To - Ju Yeon Kim From – Yu Hyelee
ReplyDelete(200902149 Yu Hyelee)
1. What I like about this piece of writing is your topic because I always interested in diet and many people too.
2. Your main point seems to be the two main factors to have slim body.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful: “Therefore, it would be a good idea to clean the refrigerator or shelves in the kitchen and throw off all the junk and fat saturated food in order to have a successful diet.” I like it because it’s very specific and practicable suggestion to the readers.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me: “doing exercise almost everyday.” “almost every kind of exercise is suitable.” These parts could be improved by adding exact number and examples.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is giving more specific examples and details. To readers exercising regularly and eating planned meal could be already very familiar things. Therefore by adding more details and advices, this essay could be more attractive.
200800759 Ju Yeon Kim /cause and effect essay/ Second draft
ReplyDeleteTo Have a Successful Diet
"Do you want to have a slim body?" is the phenomenal advertisement phrase that made people buy the exercising machine that the advertisement was advertising about on TV. Why did many people after watching this advertisement picked up the telephone and ordered that machine? It's probably because we are living in a world where a nice slim appearance is important which make people go on a constant diet. Especially women go on a diet due to the society's pressure or the media's effect on a nice slim body. Moreover, people with problems of obesity also try their effort to loose weight and achieve a healthy, slim body shape. Then, is there a way to have a successful diet that could give oneself a nice slim body?
There is no right and certain way to loose weight than doing continual exercise. Even though there are medical treatments, for instance, pills that helps oneself loose weight, and surgeries to reduce fat in the body, doing exercise everyday and regularly is the most certain and healthy way to loose weight. It is recommended by health experts to exercise, at least walk a hour a day in order to keep in shape. To loose weight and to gain a slim body, it is recommended by health experts to do exercise more than a hour, since fat inside our body starts to burn after 20 minutes of exercise. Any kind of exercise is suitable to make a slim body; jogging, swimming, doing yoga, playing jump-rope and so on. However, it is important to find the type of exercise one can do continuously, since doing exercise for a long period of time is important. If one does exercise and give up quickly, it is worse than not doing any kind of exercise because the weight can suddenly increase due to the side effect.
To loose more weight and achieve a more successful result of diet, it is necessary to have a planned meal with a regular exercise. If a person who does exercise everyday but eat more than usual will gain more weight than loosing it. Therefore, having a planned meal, a low-calorie or a low-fat balanced meal is important. Normally reducing fat, for instance, eating natural foods and avoiding fast food, sugar and salty food will help one who's on diet loose weight more effectively We can easily see books about diet meal in the bookstores which can give us a guidance in planning a diet meal. These books usually recommend to the people who are on a diet to eat a lot of vegetables, drink water everyday and try to avoid snacks such as chocolate bars, cookies and soda drinks. Therefore, it would be a good idea to clean the refrigerator or shelves in the kitchen and throw off all the junk and fat saturated food in order to have a successful diet.