First of all, it is about television's enormous educational impacts. More programs are made, more sorts of information are supposed to be given to children in different ways ranging from English, geographic education to morals. Moreover, these programs are programmed at children's level and they are mostly interesting and easily attracting their attention. Children therefore could absurd up the intended information unconsciously, naturally which is more effective to educate them than at a close, forced environment. Secondly, this eletronic device can encourage them to improve creativity which is considered one of the essentials for their future. A lot of TV programs are strictly programmed in terms of promoting children's mental activity by providing them colorful scenes and new forms of production and character-recently, these are even related to psychology and considered as a new, specialized field-. It would finally cause them more creative. Lastly, television can stimulate children to have a good personality. Since impact of stress is considerably expanding throughout all of the human generations, from the little to the adults, children programs primarily based on entertainment can help the little reduce their stress at any extent and even form a good personality like generousness, kindness, etc.
Despite such important effects of television to children, I agree that there exists its bad points. What is most important for them is to allow them to watch it for a modest time and good well-organized programs, that is, parents' control. Any good medicine is efficacious only if it is used good.
1. What I like about this piece of writing is body paragraph that explains why TV is good for children.
ReplyDelete2. Your main point seems to be a television is beneficial to children.
3. “this eletronic device can encourage them to improve creativity which is considered one of the essentials for their future. “ struck me as powerful: I never thought that TV can help to create creativity.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. “children programs primarily based on entertainment can help the little reduce their stress at any extent and even form a good personality like generousness, kindness, etc.” I understand what you are saying but it is not clear enough to support your idea.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is using an “etc” and some words. I would prefer using “cons and pros” rather than “for and against”.