Coming-of-Age Day
200902474 Lee Su Jin
In many countries, there are Coming-of-Age Day. In this day, people congratulate a boy or a girl for becoming an adult. And it shows their customs well. So they are different each other. It is very interesting that compare these and contrast these. Especially, I will see the custom of Korea and that of a Masai.
In Korea, we give rose, perfume and kiss to boy(girl). I think that many koreans think that these things symbolize being adult well. Maybe a rose express a romantic love, perfume shows maturing, and kiss means permission of love. It is just my thought. Anyway people joy freedom in that day. But in Masai, the ceremony of Coming-of-Age Day is more serious than Korea. Men of Masai think that a man become a real adult when he can defeat tiger by himself. So boys of Masai are training for being a real man. Unlike people in Korea, there are many tasks to be a adult.
However like Korea, the Coming-of-Age Day is also important day in Masai. And people of both countries congratulate the day sincerely. I think that only the pattern of way is different, but the root is similar.
From Noh Young Sun to Lee Su Jin
ReplyDelete1.Does the thesis statement compare two subjects?
Yes, the thesis statement compares the ways of celebrating the coming-of-Age day in Korea and in Masai
2. Does one body paragraph focus on comparison and one on contrast?
There is only one body paragraph that focuses only on comparison.
3.Does the body paragraph have a clear topic sentence?
Nope;; I think there is no topic sentence in the body paragraph.
4.Does each topic sentence state the point of comparison or contrast?
Nope;
5.Does each body paragraph contain details to support the comparison or contrast?
Yep. The body paragraph is full of supporting sentences that provide details.
6.Did the writer use connectors to add coherence?
Yep, there are connectors used in the body paragraph such as unlike in this sentence” Unlike people in Korea, there are many tasks to be a adult”
To - Noh Young Sun From- Jitendra Kumar Gupta
ReplyDelete1. Does your thesis statement compare two subjects?
- Yes. This is done in between Paris and New York.
2. Does one body paragraph focus on comparison and one on contrast?
- Yes, it has comparison between Paris and NYC.
3. Does each body paragraph have a clear topic sentence?
- Yes, each body paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
4. Does each topic sentence state the point of comparison or contrast?
- Yes, each topic sentence states the point of comparison or contrast.
5. Does each body paragraph contain details to support the comparison or contrast?
- Yes, each body paragraph contains details to support the comparison or contrast.
6. Did you use connectors to add coherence?
- Yes, the writer uses connectors to add coherence.