There are two places which are so different that I like both in completely different meanings. One is my home town which is located completely countryside and the one Seoul which is the capital of Korea. In general, since I don't like crowded places and I entirely love nature, I in general prefer living in a small rural area like my hometown. However, because of these big differences I also somewhat appreciate the urban life in Seoul. They obviously have many differences in terms of various things such as culture, nature and people.
Let me talk first about culture. If someone asks what culture is, I would not be able to give him/her a certain answer for culture contains very wide meanings and fields. But, if I only take here art-or spectacles, something cultural to see- extending from painting to concert as a big part of culture, it is sure that Seoul, which are full of museums, concert halls, cinemas, theaters and bookstores or libraries is culturally much richer than my hometown which has only one library, a bookstore, one multi-functioned hall, neither any cinema nor theater. About people's life, in general Korean people always hurry, "pali-pali". However, those people in such big city, they look very stressed, always occupied with something while those in the country seem to be relatively relaxed, less pressed to do something and so more smily in their daily life. Next, the latter is still surrounded by quite well-preserved nature around like several mountains and numerous farms, and old, traditional things while the former are full of modern, tall buildings or some stores, such as most of the cafés or clothes stores, very often imitating western styles. Lastly, a big part of rural people are dreaming of going out of their small city and living in a big city, especially in Seoul. On the other hand, people living in Seoul, if they are in certain good conditions enough to do it, are dreaming of living countryside by anticipating less crowed and stressful, and more peaceful, friendly-nature life.
In conclusion, these very different places are the ones I love. I love those big differences between the two and for these, I cannot choose just one place to live in. And for the same reasons, I have always been dreaming of the opposite one, that is, when I was living in my hometown, countryside, I was dreaming of a big city while now as living in the biggest city in Korea, of going back to nature. I'm therefore a dreaming person and even will be.
From Yu Hyelee To Yi Minji
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1.Does your thesis statement compare two subjects?
Yes, her hometown and Seoul.
2.Does one body paragraph focus on comparison and one on contrast?
There is one body paragraph and it focus on contrast.
3.Does each body paragraph have a clear topic sentence?
Yes, but I think some are bit long.
4.Does each topic sentence state the point of comparison or contrast?
Yes, it does.
5.Does each paragraph contain details to support the comparison or contrast?
Yes
6.Did you use connectors to add coherence?
Yes, she used various connectors in appopriate spots.
(I want to know the exact name of your home town. I think readers might want to know about it.)
To Mijin Yi From Seonyoung Blair Hwang
ReplyDelete1. Yes. Her hometown which is rural area and Seoul, an urban area.
2. I don't see that many comparison in her writing. She categorized and tried to contrast details according to the categories, but there are not enough comparison.
3. Yes. Each paragraph has its main topic.
4. The first and the second paragraph tells about the two different cities and the third one indicates her own expressions of living specific area.
5. Yes. She tried to tell details of each area.
6. Yes. She used connectors.
There are two places which are so different that I like both in completely different meanings. One is my home town which is located completely countryside and the one Seoul which is the capital of Korea. In general, since I don't like crowded places and I entirely love nature, I in general prefer living in a small rural area like my hometown. However, because of these big differences I also somewhat appreciate the urban life in Seoul. They obviously have many differences in terms of various things such as culture, nature and people.
ReplyDeleteLet me talk first about culture. If someone asks what culture is, I would not be able to give him/her a certain answer for culture contains very wide meanings and fields. But, if I only take here art-or spectacles, something cultural to see- extending from painting to concert as a big part of culture, it is sure that Seoul, which are full of museums, concert halls, cinemas, theaters and bookstores or libraries is culturally much richer than my hometown which has only one library, a bookstore, one multi-functioned hall, neither any cinema nor theater. About people's life, in general Korean people always hurry, "pali-pali". However, those people in such big city, they look very stressed, always occupied with something while those in the country seem to be relatively relaxed, less pressed to do something and so more smily in their daily life. Next, the latter is still surrounded by quite well-preserved nature around like several mountains and numerous farms, and old, traditional things while the former are full of modern, tall buildings or some stores, such as most of the cafés or clothes stores, very often imitating western styles. Lastly, a big part of rural people are dreaming of going out of their small city and living in a big city, especially in Seoul. On the other hand, people living in Seoul, if they are in certain good conditions enough to do it, are dreaming of living countryside by anticipating less crowed and stressful, and more peaceful, friendly-nature life.
Despite such huge differences, these two different places have some similarities. First of all, my hometown lived for 20 years until high school my essential life place. Similarly, now, from university, Seoul is where I have been living for last 3 years and this biggest city in Korea is my twentieth life place. Moreover, both are to me the places which give me desire to and not to live in simultaneously because of each place’s good and bad things.
In conclusion, these very different places are the ones I love. I love those big differences between the two and for these things, I cannot choose just one place to live in. And for the same reasons, I have always been dreaming of the opposite one, that is, when I was living in my hometown, countryside, I was dreaming of a big city while now as living in the biggest city in Korea, of going back to nature. I'm therefore a dreaming person and even will be.