P.104-4 opinion essay
200900547 Kim Si Eun
Children and TV
According to the survey, American children watch an average of three to fours hours of television daily. It means televisions has great influence to children. Of course, television also has several benefit. but these days programs have more negative side than positive side.
The most important reason why tv has more negative sides than positive side is its violence, More and more programs became violent to attract viewers. these programs not only make children become dull to the horror of violence but also gradually accept violence as a way to solve problems. It means that many children use violence first when facing problem as they learn from tv programs. And some studies says as the more younger children are, the more they try to imitate what they see. So children can be easily affected by emotional and behavioral learning.
So from those reasons. I think children couldn't grow well if they watched tv at young age. Therefore we, including parents and also as wise viewer, we make efforts to make better program and try to pretend our children from bad tv programs
To Si Eun Kim From Ju Yeon Kim
ReplyDelete1. Does the essay have three paragraphs?
- Yes, it has three paragraphs.
2. Does the introduction include a hook to get reader's attention along with background infromation?
- Yes it has a hook based on the survey and provides a brief background infomaiton about what the writer's going to talk about.
3. Is the writer's opinion about the issue clearly stated in the thesis statement?
- Yes it is clearly stated. The writer thinks that TV has negative effects than positive effects on children.
4. Does the body paragraph contain facts and reasons that support the opinion?
- Yes the body paragraph contain facts and reasons that support the opinion. It saids that TV contains violence that many children could imitate without knowing its meaning.
5. Put a chek in the margin next to the points that you understand and agree with. Explain.
- I agree with the sentence 'Therefore we, including parents and also as wise viewer, we make efforts to make better program and try to pretend our children from bad tv programs'. I agree that TV has negative effects on children than positive effects and therefore, we (adults and parents) should guide and protect children from harmful TV programs.
6. Write one or two questions about something that needs clarification or additional support.
- Are there any research about the children who learned bad behavior from TV and got injured or hurt? (received negative effects?)
- Can you specify several benefits of TV briefly?
From Yu Hyelee To Kim Sieun
ReplyDelete(200902149 Yu Hyelee)
1. Does the essay have three paragraphs?
→ Yes, it has.
2. Does the introduction include a hook to get the reader's attention along with background information?
→ Yes, in here statistics are used as a hook. And I think it deliver well what the writer tries to say.
3. Is the writer's opinion about the issue clearly stated in the thesis statement?
→ Yes.
4. Does the body paragraph contain facts and reasons that support the opinion?
→ Yes, it has both facts and reasons.
5. The points that you understand and agree with and explain why you agree.
→ “More and more programs became violent to attract viewers.”
I agree with it because as time goes by, I could see so many violent and crucial scenes especially in TV dramas. Even last week I wated a drama that one bad man kidnapped one woman and stabbed a man with a dagger.
6. Write one or two questions about something that needs clarification or additional support.
→ You wrote the bodyparagraph about the violence of TV and I think it would be much effective if you add more reasons. Can you add more reasons at least 2 more?
→ Can you let me know where the survey and study are come from?