As bringing up those two different pets, my friend recommend two different charming pet, cat and dog. Before I was told about those two pets , like most of people, I think those two pets are totally different. It's true that cat and dog are different in their habits. But both of them are attractive pets to us.
In short, cats are independent. so we can't be bothered by taking care of them.
For example, most of cats are housebroken quickly. So after taught which place is bathroom, cats didn't make troubles in it. They are also good at cleaning themselves. Above mentioned, they are independent and love to be alone. so too much touch could give them stress.
Dogs are easy to be friends. Of course It is different depending on their species, most of them tend to follow their owners and try not to do what their owners dislike.
Cats and dog, we couldn't tell which one is better as our pets. But most important thing is they have each attraction. We could be friends each other as we know them better.
From Noh Young Sun to Kim Si Eun
ReplyDelete1.I like the simple ,easy-to- understand language that you used in this essay.
2.The essay is about cats and dogs.
3.I like this sentence ‘ln short, cats are independent. so we can't be bothered by taking care of them’
4.‘They are also good at cleaning themselves.’ At first glance I did not have any idea what this sentence means. After reading the next few lines. I could understand what you are trying to say. I think you should rewrite this sentence, because it could be quite confusing.
5.I think you did not really compare the two pets. You just wrote about dog and cats respectively in the second and third paragraph. Besides, the body paragraphs are a bit too short in my view.
TO Kim Si Eun From Kim Kyung Un
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it is very simly written with clear point of what the write is trying to convey to the readers.
2. Your main point seems to be that there are both similarities and differences between cats and dogs.
3. In the essay, the sentence I liked most is 'But both of them are attractive pets to us.' because it was a simple way of wrapping up the introduction sentence.
4. The sentence 'It's true that cat and dog are different in their habits.' didn't really make sense to me. You might as well as other few sentences, explain it in detail.
5. In my opinion, I think the writer needs to work on explaining in details. Most of the sentences seem to lack of examples or explanations. With interesting details, it will make the writing more lively.
As bringing up those two different pets, my friend recommend two different charming pet, cat and dog. Before I was told about those two pets , like most of people, I think those two pets are totally different. It's true that cat and dog are different in their nature habits. But both of them are attractive pets to us.
ReplyDeleteIn short, cats are independent. so we can't be bothered by taking care of them.
For example, most of cats are housebroken quickly. So after taught which place is bathroom, cats didn't make troubles in it. They are also good at cleaning themselves.Because they always licking their body to clean themselves. Above mentioned, they are independent and love to be alone. so too much touch could give them stress.
Dogs are easy to be friends. Of course It is different depending on their species, most of them tend to follow their owners and try not to do what their owners dislike.
Cats and dogs, we couldn't tell which one is better as our pets. But most important thing is they have each attraction. We could be friends each other as we know them better.