To have a successful day
Going to bed lately, and waking up lately. And watching TV when I have free time. Is it comfortable? In my case, I'm more tired when I sleep irregularly, and I am very uncomfortable because I think that I wasted time very much. It is important to have a successful day. But how we can do it?
First, we have to arrange what we have to do carefully before going to bed. By doing this, we don't have to extravagate or miss something. Second, to sleep early and get up early is very important. Because we can use more time of day. If we get up late, we can't do all our works. Finally, it is good if you write diary before retiring at night because it makes you look back your day, and develop your life.
And what we have to when we have free time? I think that watching TV, and searching the Internet without purpose are fruitless. It is necessary having time to do that appropriately. And it is better reading book, preparing other works beforehand, and exercising etc. I think that there are many things we have to do although we think that we have free time.
To have a successful day is connected with successful life. With thought of having a day successfully is important, we can do it more better. How wonderful we can go to bed with sense of satisfaction? Only behavior can make better day.
To Lee Su Jin from Kim Kyung Un
ReplyDelete1. What I like about the piece of writing is that it is written in an easy sentence that makes it easier for readers to catch the point. However, I think it's kind of off topic from what the essay was supposed to be about? What it takes to become a successful person
2. Your main points seems to be to hav a successful day is connected with successful life.
3. I thought 'only behavior can make better day' was intriuging, because I agree with that sentence. Actually getting things done and making some actions satisfy my day.
4. How wonderful we can go to bed with sense of satisfaction? I think overall the sentence should be detailed alittle bit more so that readers can fully grasp what you are trying to talk about.
5. The paragraph was organized well. However, I think the writer should work with detailing and giving specific examples. Also, it would be alot better with a stronger thesis statement to each paragraphs :)
To Lee Su Jin From Ju Yeon Kim
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that it's written in a very simple way which is easy to understand.
2. Your main point seems to be that having a successful day is important because that will lead to a successful life.
3. I liked the sentence, 'I think that watching TV, and searching the Internet without purpose are fruitless', because I agree with this idea also. I also think that just spending time doing nothing but watching TV or surfing on the internet without a purpose is a waste of time.
4. Everyting was clear to me. (the meanings in the sentences)
5. I think the essay would be a lot better if the witer add more details and examples. It will make the essay more fruitful :D