pg 128 4-paragraph comparison and contrast essay
Intro to Academic Writing(2) Wed 7,8
200902149 ELI Yu Hyelee
Metamorphosis and Bible
There are two very famous books named Metamorphosis and the Bible. Metamorphosis is the book written by Ovid, a poet who lived in roman times. Metamorphosis means the story of change and actually this book is mainly filled with changing stories. The bible is a scared book in Christianity and also the most well known book in the world. Both books are very similar in some points and also very different in other points.
Both books cover a subject of God and give answers such as "Who create the world?" and "Where did the men came from?" Besides, some main story lines are very similar. For example, the story of Lycaon and Noah's ark has many similarities. People in both stories were corrupted and God decided to punish them. And as a result, the world was destroyed but only a few people survived and restart the human history.
However, both not only have similarities but also have many differences. Although two books have similar story lines, the writing style is totally different. Ovid wrote very precisely. He gave many details unlike Bible. In the story of Lycaon that I mentioned above, he conveyed very detailed descriptions such as a gruesome scene of world and the way Gods wreck the world. Whereas, the Bible depicts in very ambiguous way so the thing we can see is very confined.
Even though both have its distinctive feature and are regarded very differently, they all have important value and similarities in it.
TO Yu Hye Lee From Kim Kyung Un
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is that there are thesis statement in each paragraphs, has enough interesting points for reasoning, and it has simple sentences that readers can understand easily.
2. Your main point seems to be that there are both similarities and differences between Metamorphosis and Bible book.
3. In the essay, the sentence I liked most is ' In the story of Lycaon that I mentioned above, he conveyed very detailed descriptions such as a gruesome scene of world and the way Gods wreck the world' because I thought the writer used some god descriptive words such as 'gruesome'.
4. Whereas, the Bible depicts in very ambiguous way so the thing we can see is very confined. This sentence was understandable. However, I think the writer should give one example of what it means.
5. In my opinion, I think the writer did a great job organizing into four paragraphs with nice description and explanation. However,I think the conclusion paragraph could be written alot better.
pg 128 4-paragraph comparison and contrast 2nd draft
ReplyDeleteIntro to Academic Writing(2) Wed 7,8
200902149 ELI Yu Hyelee
Metamorphosis and the Bible
There are two very famous books named Metamorphosis and the Bible. Metamorphosis is the book written by Ovid, a poet who lived in roman times. Metamorphosis means the story of change and actually this book is mainly filled with changing stories. The Bible is a scared book in Christianity and the most well known book in the world. Both books are very similar in some points and also very different in other points.
Both books cover a subject of God and give answers such as "Who create the world?" and "Where did the men came from?" Besides, some main story lines are very similar. For example, the story of Lycaon and Noah's Ark has many similarities. People in both stories were corrupted and God decided to punish them. And as a result, the world was destroyed but only a few people survived and restart the human history. Like this story it’s easy to find many similar story lines in two books.
However, both not only have similarities but also have many differences. The writing styles of two books are totally different. Ovid wrote very precisely. It means he gave many details. In the story of Lycaon that I mentioned above, he conveyed very detailed descriptions such as a gruesome scene of world and the way Gods wreck the world. Whereas, the Bible have very ambiguous writing style so the thing we can see is very confined. Just like metamorphosis, God of the Bible wrecked the world but we cannot know what exact things were happened and how terrible it was.
In American and Britain Literature class, I studied those two books- the Bible and metamorphosis. At that time, I knew both books well but didn’t even think they have much commons and differences. But after the semester I could learn these facts and I think it wil be very interesting experience to read two books after fully aware those similarities and differences.